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Post by Quest on Mar 14, 2009 15:50:14 GMT -5
I've decided to make a story based on {Jedi} like so many others have. This, however, takes place in a new kind of setting like some newer stories being made. It doesn't take place during the summer of '06, or '07 for that matter. Nope, definetly not '08 because we weren't together then. It is none-other than now, or at least eventually be now. Please don't worry, as I will try to include everyone in old and new {Jedi}. You might not be a character, but you will at least be mentioned. I will also include some allies and enemies of {Jedi}, along with some different ones. I will also have one person be two characters at once. For example, Ender is mentioned in the story as a historical hero, but Secretus (a name Ender uses sometimes) is a main character. Well, tell me if you like it, and tell me what I can do to make it better. I plan on trying to make a movie out of it, but that's a different topic. Seeing now that this is taking forever, I will actually post the story on the next post. Enjoy, and sorry for this long paragraph or whatever
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Post by Quest on Mar 14, 2009 15:52:58 GMT -5
A long time ago in a galaxy far far away… Chapter 1: Miraculous Victory
Yet another close call of being blasted into dust had been made. Secretus had nearly avoided a stray blaster shot that almost disentigrated his Aurek fighter. He was surprised it hadn’t in the middle of this chaos over Coruscant, and even the Force won’t keep him from death for long. Secretus cursed to himself and cursed the Sith for attacking them and starting this war. Everywhere he could see there were numerous starships blasting at their opposers unmercifully. He looked down at the city-planet below, and wondered how much more time he would have to survive. He snapped himself back into reality as he headed to a dagger-shaped ship with his squadron. Now was the time that he would prove himself, and ultimately help the Leaders in achieving immediate victory over the Sith that would be recorded in history. Admiral Doom formed his fleets with his best effort around Coruscant to defend it from the Sith. Much Sith forces had already landed on the planet, but were toe to toe with more {Jedi} forces. He had to defend Coruscant long enough until his friends and fellow leaders of {Jedi} could complete their tasks. “How close are our Jedi assasin squads to eliminating their target?” asked Doom. “They should be arriving at the Ravager in about 10 minutes, no estimation on when they’ll get to the bridge though.” The captain, otherwise known as Allcaps, had served with Doom long enough to know that he liked quick calculations. It was a good thing he was good at math. Just a little longer until they could break the hell that came upon them. “Admiral, we are outnumbered by 3 to 1, and I don’t see how taking a chance to destroy this factory with our only remaining defenses will help turn the tides in this war while we are on the edge of losing everything.” Ganner grew tired of hearing similar comments, but he pressed on. He somehow felt that, despite everything that could happen even if he succeeded in destroying the Sith’s Star Forge factory, it was well worth it and could somehow “pause” the war like the others said. “We have no other option! We must go through the middle to get through, despite our losses. We will at least die trying.” The group of the Hammerhead Cruisers of {Jedi} headed toward the jaws of death that was about to enclose on them. Every turn left or right would end up with seeing more battles between Dark and Light Jedi. Predalien finally delivered the Mass Shadow Generator, MSG for short, to its intended destination with his {Jedi} commandos. Now they would have to defend long enough as it was being activated and had to get out before they were crushed with the Sith Academy around them. Just a little more time, and he will be back with the others to hopefully end this, all of it. “Incoming hostiles!” shouted Predalien while charging at the red glows in the caves with his men. Only a little more time left. Secretus immediately jumped out of his cockpit with about seven others engaging droids and Dark Jedi all around. He quickly made it throught the hanger, and split up with a fellow teamate, just as everyone else did. He, along with DOOM, were going to have the honor of defeating the Dark Lord himself, and bring justice to the one who was responsible for so much destruction and bloodshed. Secretus immediately dispersed his lust for revenge, and focused on what was at hand as he went up the elevator. He remembered the {Jedi} code, remembered his father, and remembered his friends. The doors opened, and with DOOM, he walked towards the observation window across the bridge, staring at the black cloak the stood still ahead. He activated his lightsaber as he saw a red glow come out of the black. Miracle. Yes, that was the word for it. Only a third of his ships were left back to hold off the hordes of hostiles that tried to thwart their path. Now, they were on top of the sphere of the Star Forge. He saw that the ships left back were already destroyed, and he didn’t have much time. Ganner ordered all ships to target a specific object on the sphere, and took a deep breath. He never felt so alive, even though he was about to die. He could barely contain himself. The countdown was coming to a close, and Predalien knew it. He and the others were making their way out of the academy, fighting off any who tried to stop and engage them. Pred found himself fighting many Sith, even ten at once. The number didn’t matter. He had so much adrenaline, with combined usage of the Force, and plunged through, killing everything in his path. He made it to the hangar, and some decided to sacrifice themselves to hold of any enemies that tried to escape. They would not be forgotten. As the shuttles took off, Predalien took one more look at the planet before it was utterly destroyed. Malachor. So much darkness, now gone, taking so many of the light with it. Tears streamed down his face. The cloak came off and silverish armor could now be visible with some black. No doubt it was a one of a kind, and only worn by the Dark Lord himself, also known as Sith. “You are a fool, {Jedi}. To have come this far and think that you could defeat the Dark Lord of the Sith? You are more than a fool. You are…” “It is time for justice to be served in this war. Finally.” Secretus was eager to begin and punish the one who had done so much wrong. “If you think we are fools, you are mistaken. We live in peace, not feed our desires through the cost of the blood of others!” DOOM had exclaimed while charging at Sith with his purple lightsaber. Secretus charged in too with his double viridian blade, and together, the two faced two red sabers wielded by Sith. They fought all throughout the bridge for what seemed like hours. In truth, it had only been five minutes, and all three were gasping for breath as they fought. The two {Jedi} lunged and slashed Sith’s legs and arms off simutaneously, watching him scream in pain. It seemed like he had some last words, but unexpectedly died before he could mutter anything. Strange, neither Secretus nor DOOM moved in for the kill. They isolated their thoughts and headed back to the hangar. As they flew out in their fighters with their fellow squad mates, they watched the Ravager explode, and headed to Admiral Doom’s flagship to report their success. After a huge bombardment followed by an explosion, the Star Forge lost stability and fell into the sun that it was using to fuel itself. Ganner leaped for joy with so many others, as they watched the enemy ships stand motionless as they retreated into hyperspace. They did it. It appeared Doom was right in his theory of disabling the Sith fleets by destroying their source. Now it was time for them to head home for the celebration. Or so it was thought...
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Post by Corran on Mar 14, 2009 16:03:44 GMT -5
Play much KOTOR 1/2?
Not bad but I would work on clarity of details if I were you, it seemed a bit scrammbled to me in some places.
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Post by Quest on Mar 14, 2009 17:58:12 GMT -5
Chapter 2: The Treaty of Cohabitation “Attention all {Jedi}! Attention all {Jedi}! The Supreme Chancellor has been captured by the Sith! Repeat! The Sith have captured the Chancellor!” Doom, along with all other {Jedi}, were all stunned. How could it be that the Sith captured the Chancellor if they were totally immobilized and in disarray when the Dark Lord and the Dark Council had been eliminated along with their droid army disabled? The question lurked in the minds of everyone, as they turned to the monitors that broadcasted the News Flash. What looked like a Zabrak female held the Chancellor binded and gagged at her right. She looked prideful and ready to explode in arrogance. There was this, sadness and anger, that loomed in her eyes. No doubt it was a Sith, and a strong one in the Force. She had to be in order to get passed the Chancellor’s defenses. “As of now, despite recent reports…” the voice sounded almost that of some Queen and the eyes staring into the screen like a wild cat’s “…the Sith Empire has {Jedi} at her knees. WE HAVE THE CHANCELLOR CAPTIVE, AND ARE GRIPPING {Jedi}’s THROAT. We now demand the terms of surrender from {Jedi}”-she never finished.
Just then, the camera turned and right there, with DOOM and Secretus, a huge army was gathered all around. The Sith looked surprised and afraid, but hatred could still be seen. “We do not come in terms of surrender. We come because we see that each side partaking in this war has been defeated. There is no victor or loser. It seems that we are now on equal ground.” DOOM looked ready to fight, but his stance didn’t show it. Everyone was about to be surprised at what was going to happen next. “For years, {Jedi} and (Sith) have fought, but now I see that we seem to have equal military efficiency. It seems that we both are in complicated positions, as {Jedi} will need a new leader to lead their Republic, and (Sith) will need a good security force to keep their galactic throne.” “You aren’t saying…” The Zabrak barely made the words out of her mouth. “…a…truce? A truce between…{Jedi} and (Sith)?” Everyone gaped, and seemed that they couldn’t imagine anything like that becoming real. How could good and evil co-exist?
“Gather what leaders you still have at the Senate Building by 0100 hours. There, both {Jedi} and (Sith) leaders will negotiate a treaty between the two.” With that, everyone was confused as the monitors went off. Doom had a lot of explaining to do when Predalien and Ganner got back. Even though DOOM and Secretus saved the Chancellor, they were asking for something that couldn’t be done. Or could it? Was it possible that the two former enemies could live in peace, not trying to destroy the other? How was it even possible that two ancient enemies could even think of a truce with the other? “I guess we will have to see what the future, and the Force, has in store for us” Doom said to himself.
At 1:00 AM Coruscant Time, every leader on Coruscant of both factions in the war was crowded into the Senate Building. Almost everyone else on Coruscant wwere building loud crowds outside, waiting to see what would happen. Inside, the leaders had finished negotiating, and it was time to announce their final decision: The Treaty of Cohabitation. “This treaty is simply an agreement that the (Sith) will rule the Outer Parts of the galaxy while the {Jedi} will rule the Inner Parts” was the answer that the Supreme Chancellor gave to everyone.
“Unbelievable, it is, that (Sith) and {Jedi} have made an agreement like this. I myself think I am dreaming this whole thing as everyone else is. Too long has their been constant wars being waged over dominance in the galaxy, too long have they dragged actual beings to kill each other. Today, everything will be different. Today, we enter a new era, an era, which both {Jedi} and (Sith) will be peaceful neighbors, and eventually, hopefully, become one Republic, one galaxy, for thousands and thousands of years. So, without further adue, I would like to call the representatives of both civilizations of the galaxy up. Put your hands together for newly annointed (Sith) Queen Tigeress and {Jedi} Chief Commander Doom!” The applause was so loud that it was possible to be heard planetwide. It not only was being broadcasted to Coruscant, but every system in the galaxy. Many had tears run down their faces and hollered happily for peace. Peace, after all this time. Finally. The two leaders came up and shook hands with each other and the Chancellor. Tigeress spoke from there. “Today, I have agreed with both Supreme Chancellor Zan and Chief Commander Doom, along with many others, to sign this treaty so that there may finally be peace and tranquility to all!” The crowds screamed in excitement. Doom took it from there. “As Chief Commander, I feel privileged to work with Queen Tigeress and Chancellor Zan to make a better galaxy! No longer will families be separated, no more worlds be demolished, and all races and species in the galaxy will continue to exist without fear of extinction! This, we three vow!” With that, all three signed the treaty, and everyone clapped, sang, screamed, cried, and embraced each other for what had just happened. Galactic peace had been achieved, and now was the time to celebrate.
Days later, after the Treaty of Cohabitation was signed and everyone agreed to help to escort the (Sith) to their region of the galaxy, Tigeress sat on the throne of her ship, rethinking everything that happened. Her master was dead along with all his generals, her Empire was almost killed, she had been humiliated in front of the galaxy, and now she was a celebrity and admired after agreeing with her enemies. Well, now they were former enemies, new allies. Weren’t they neutral actually? Tiger tried to settle down and relax. She felt something earlier today, like a ripple in the Force. She ignored it, but now she sensed it again. It was like it was right behind her- She was pushed off her thrown and was floating in the air. She broke free of whatever grip and drawed out two lightsabers. Before she could do anything else, she was knocked off of her feet. Tigeress was then disarmed, binded by and unseen force, and was struggling to stay alive. She saw a brown cloaked man. “Relax, Enraged One. I come to you in peace.” She was still tied by something, which she guessed was a Force technique. “I come with a gift from the Dark Lord of Dark Lords, the Master of your Master.” Tigeress was shocked. She theorized it as a lie, a trick to calm her down. This was dismissed when she sensed truth. The master of her master? Wouldn’t he have been killed long ago by her master in order for him to become the Dark Lord and train her? “Do not think too hard young one. I am not here to answer questions. I am here to deliver a message. My master, now your master, instructs you to keep your new empire alive and well, and to rebuild it to glory. Not only must you rebuild its economy, but also its military. There is still one more war to be fought. Gather as many as you need, you will need many to conquer our enemy.” With that, he was gone, she was unbinded, and she saw armor rapped in robes on her throne. They looked familiar to her.
To Corran (and everyone else): Well, seeing that it's my first time doing this kind of thing, I really can't help it. I kind of intended the first chapter to be like that, and I still feel like i need to expand on that. I think I will eventually. I just feel like I need to rush through so I can actually get to the setting and what it's supposed to be about. Chapter 3 should be about some of the history and to actually reveal the setting. I'll try harder. Thanks for the help.
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Post by Queen~Tigeress on Mar 14, 2009 18:19:34 GMT -5
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Post by Quest on Mar 17, 2009 13:22:39 GMT -5
Hey all, the rookie author here. I regret to inform you all that the present day setting hasnt started yet. It'll take a little more time, or it might end up being in a different story. I hope you'll like what I've made (so far) and feel free to point out any mistakes (BUT STILL LIKE THE STORY!!!) Anyways, i am going to post the next 2 chapters on a separate post. Once again, if i have not even mentioned your name yet in the story, i will eventually. Right now it's only the beginning, and most members and old members should appear in the middle. Here you go:
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Post by Quest on Mar 17, 2009 13:27:17 GMT -5
Chapter 3: Shrouds of the Past
“Secretus? Never thought to see you here again since the war broke out. What’s been happening lately?” Otto, the current librarian of the {Jedi} temple on Coruscant, greeted his friend that had not been seen for some time. “I’ve been here and there, Mr. Librarian. One minute, I’m almost vaporized. The next, I nearly get dismembered.” Otto found humor in his friend and former student. “I see you have been busy until lately, so I suppose you come here to talk and/or find out more about the Force?” Secretus didn’t desire either, and Otto could sense it. “I see” Otto slowly stated as he walked over to a shelf and pulled out a holo-book marked {Jedi} Encyclopedia: Volume VI. Secretus took it, bowed to one of his first mentors, and walked over to a table to start looking over it. Once he found the one thing that he looked at almost every time he came into the library, he searched it through for a certain picture. There! Almost perfectly centered on the holo-page, the same picture that he had of his father was there. And by had, he owned it in the past but lost it some time during the war. Secretus looked over the article, astonished to see something new. He immediately bookmarked the page and turned to the first page. A new edition seemed to have come out over a year ago during the war. He flipped back, and read over it. Much of the information was old, but now he saw how is father died. He knew that he sacrificed himself for {Jedi}, but he never knew how. Until now that is.
“My Queen, we have successfully blockaded Nar Shaddaa and all of Nal Hutta. No more refugees will dare try to escape our will.” The young captain and right hand to the Queen in military, none other than Apollo, reported with a proud expression to his superior. “Excellent, Captain. As always, you have proved yourself of worth to me.” Tigeress, now wearing the armor and robes that were left for her after her mysterious encounter with the Messager, sounded well pleased. But there was something else, something in her voice, that sounded, well, not like the Queen. She seemed to be thinking that there was another task to finish. “Captain, I leave you here to watch over things. If you need me, I will be in my private quarters.” The private quarters for the young Dark Lord were none other than the top of the observation tower, now converted into a room, one fit for the Queen. As she made it there, she started searching her personal holo-library, looking for answers. She wanted to know about this armor she was wearing, where it came from, and who wore it before her. Whoever it was, she could still sense a little bit of their presence in the robes, as if it was still being worn by them. She stopped when she came across a new result in her search, fascinated at what she found. It appeared that the armor was possibly last worn about half a decade before. She looked for more. It seemed to be worn by a {Jedi} in that time period, a kind of lieutenant leader. Weren’t the {Jedi} in a civil war fifty years ago? Tigeress read on.
“Secretus, you’ve been here for almost two hours. You seem to be diving into knowledge more than you did three years ago.” Secretus came back to reality and found that Otto was behind him, now looking into the holo-book too. “Ah, yes. Another encyclopedia with an article based on your father. You seem so curious about him all the time.” Otto smiled at Secretus as the young man rose up and gave the reference book to Otto. “I just wanted to see if there was anything different. There was.” Otto looked at the front page of the book, closed it, and put it back. “You seem to have found something new about him.” Otto remarked. “I have. I don’t know what to think now. How could he have been killed though? Wasn’t he the greatest master of the lightsaber?” Secretus couldn’t seem to believe that such a man so powerful was capable of falling. “Yes, he was. But he also had family and friends.” Otto handed two books to Secretus. “You can check these out if you want. No one ever sees them. The last time they were opened must have been a few months ago. They won’t be missed by anyone for long.” Secretus looked up and gave a thankful smile. He waved to his friend as he went out of the library and walked back home. At least he now had something to do unlike his other friends. Predalien, Ganner, and Doom all lived in the history and knew his father personally. They didn’t need to know anymore. DOOM just didn’t care about learning, the library, or even school. It’s no wonder he joined the military instead of going to college.
“Another one, my good sirs?” Everyone waved the waiter droid with a tray of drinks off. The pazaak game at the table they were gathered around was nearing it’s end, with the two opponents tieing up almost every turn. Now it was still the last round, and they could tell someone was going to win. But who? Allcaps smiled and put down the last card in his hand. DOOM already put his last card down last round. It was a miracle he wasn’t out yet. DOOM kept a calm look. No use of going berserk over a game of pazaak. It would be a good reason to though, to lose a championship title to one rookie such as Allcaps. After the two drawed cards, both scores were seventeen. DOOM drawed out a four, now at twenty. Most of the crowd sighed, but some still looked excited. Allcaps drew one last card. It made his score nineteen. DOOM, began to smile now. Allcaps had a choice now. Either lose with no chance, or take a chance and tie with DOOM again to possibly win. Allcaps, of course, took the latter. He was almost devasted at what happened. He drew a five. A five? How could that be? The crowd hooped and hollered as they picked up DOOM and carried him around the bar. Allcaps sat there alone, gaping, at how he had lost. He went over to where DOOM now was, and sighed. DOOM only laughed and gave his friend a pat on the back. “Better luck next time.” He had said to encourage his friend. “Yeah, but next time I won’t get as much attention ‘cause I’m a rookie.” They both laughed at that and walked out of the bar, the crowd still cheering. This seemed to be one interesting day. Not only had he read more about his father and was aloud to take two references out of the library, he seemed to have run into two friends unexpectedly on the streets of Coruscant. “You wouldn’t believe it Secretus! Caps here thought he could get me at my own game. I showed him!” Caps immediately came back upon the prideful statement. “I was close, and you know it DOOM. I could see a bit of nervousness in your eyes.” “Yeah, yeah. So, I see you’re becoming a bookworm again Sec. You got to learn how to celebrate more after we have ended a two and a half year war.” Secretus only smiled, but his friends could see through it. Allcaps broke the silence. “What do you have there?” pointing at the books. “Some stuff that will help me know more about my father’s…murder.” Both were shocked to hear what Allcaps said. Murder? Hadn’t Ender Hegemon, father of Secretus Hegemon, sacrifice himself to disassemble an army that almost destroyed {Jedi}? “How?” DOOM asked. “I’m about to find out. You guys can change your minds and come with me to my apartment.” With that, all three headed to a tall skyscraper. Once inside, they all sat around the desk at which Secretus opened the books at. They found out that a final battle on Rhen Var was fought long ago, ending a {Jedi} civil war. The origins of the war were explained in one book, and the cause of the war was found in a biography of a friend of Secretus’s father named Teff. Teff seemed to be of equal power with Ender, and the two became friends. Teff helped defend the {Jedi} Republic from another enemy, and was a hero. A hero who had influence over half of the {Jedi}. Enough to form them into an empire.
Chapter 4: Rhen Var Hotshot. The name seemed familiar, as if she had heard it before. The armor-robes that she now wore belonged to this man, who was made a co-leader of an empire that formed out of the {Jedi} republic. She read that Hotshot was one of the many that were among the {Jedi} and turned on the other half that didn’t agree with their leader. This leader seemed to have been deceptive enough to convince the three authority figures of the {Jedi}, the Grand Masters, into making him one of them. When one of the Grand Masters had gone off to search for something in the outer edges of the galaxy, he turned on the two others and declared treason on them. He then turned the {Jedi} into a militaristic civilization under a tyranny. The {Jedi} were temporarily given the name Spartans, who were a tribe of {Jedi} that this leader was from. The Spartans conquered many civilizations around them, forming a huge galactic empire. When the missing Grand Master returned, he released the other two and brought out an army of legendary warriors. The two sides fought a massive war, each toe-to-toe with the other. The final battle was fought on a planet called Rhen Var, at an ancient temple that had been around since the {Jedi} began. There, the returned Grand-Master fought the Emperor while the last battle was going on. At this time, Hotshot was with another Right-Hand of the Emperor, whose name is also not specified in the holo-cron. In the end, this Hotshot was killed by the other Right-Hand, with the armor being scavenged somehow. Tigeress wanted to know more about this. She searched through what she had, failing to find what she was looking for. There was only one way to find the answer to her question. The planet Rhen Var. Secretus saw that the biography seemed incomplete, and there might be another part to it. All he could find was that Teff had been trained into a {Jedi} by many masters, including the Grand Masters and an unknown group of lightsaber masters, which his father also was a member of. No doubt it was evidence of the friendship between the two. He also found in the book about the {Jedi} Civil War about how an empire was formed by a new Grand Master who was deceptive, and managed to do it under their noses. This was Teff. When two Grand Masters found out, it was too late. The other one, who seemed to be named Ender Hegemon, Secretus’s father, had disappeared and reappeared, only to be killed in a fight he had with Teff during the final battle. Teff, in turn, lost his sight and his body began to decay at a rapid pace. Teff disappeared after Ender died, along with another Grand Master, Tchdwn, who was the one that found Teff to be Force-sensitive in the first place. It also seemed to be incomplete too. He found looked back and double-checked to see where the final battle was fought again. Once again, he read Rhen Var. Rhen Var was an outer edge world. That meant it was now in (Sith) territory. He remembered that one could travel from the {Jedi} territory to the (Sith) territory if they had a specific pass. No doubt these would be selling of fast. “DOOM, Caps, we’re going on a little trip. Any of you like the sound of Rhen Var?” Doom had been looking at the sunset of Coruscant as he sipped his cup of coffee. There was still more reconstruction to do, but that would take time. He also had to manage to somehow use different resources, now that the {Jedi} Republic has been almost halved over the years. On the bright side, his men finished escorting the last of the (Sith) to their worlds days ago, relieving him of some stress. At least he wasn’t the only one. Ganner went off to Corellia to some convention to see if he could manage to create new types of ships that would use less fuel until he could find an efficient fuel source. So far, the majority of the fuel they had came in from the (Sith), which would only last for ten years according to the treaty. To this day he wondered if it would have been worth having the Chancellor and all of the Senate to be killed and get new ones after trying to keep the governement from completely collapsing. At least they would be rid of the (Sith), even if they had to destroy themselves. Predalien had gone off to Onderon, where he would call a meeting to discuss with certain systems to stay with the {Jedi} instead of forming their own confederate civilization. Doom didn’t understand why some wanted to waste time and money creating a new republic, only to have it last for a short time and probably collapse, taking many more down. Secretus entered, and Doom went wide awake and stood up a little surprised. “Sorry for barging in here unannounced, Chief-Commander. I needed to ask you something about travel.” Doom lifted a brow at Secretus’s curious excuse. He glared at DOOM and Allcaps, who were beside Secretus, and turned back to him. “I see that you all want your own private passes signed off by the government instead of waiting and wasting time and money to get your own. If only you guys knew how much work I have to do to manage half of a galaxy.” Doom gave in though, and pulled out three cards that seemed to have luster. Each had a seal on them that beared the symbol of the {Jedi}, along with Doom’s own minimized signature. He handed it to DOOM and Allcaps first, then gave Secretus his. “Before you leave, tell me what you intend to do with those. You all either have to be bored and looking for trouble or out of your minds if you want to head into (Sith) territory without assignment.” Secretus put two books on Doom’s desk, both bookmarked to pages that held the name, location, and coordinates of Rhen Var. Doom looked shocked. “So, you all want to go and dive into the knowledge of history. I know you would Secretus, but DOOM and Allcaps?” Doom looked down at the books and read more. He had a serious and almost mournful expression on his face. The three understood, and knew that Doom, along with Ganner and Predalien, lived through not only that battle, but the entire war. Doom looked back up, and dismissed the three. “Good luck! Hope you find what you are looking for!” he said as the others waved before the doors closed.
As the scene of hyperspace faded away and the stars stood still, Tigeress looked out the observation window in her throne room. She saw a white-blue planet, none other than Rhen Var. The comm beeped and the sound of the captain’s voice said “My Queen, we have arrived at Rhen Var.” Tigeress smiled and went down the elevator. She remembered that her master told her of Rhen Var, and that not only had it been a former capital and founding place of the {Jedi}, but that it was filled with the Force. The ancient founder Darkknight built a fortress, far away but still visible from the capital city. The fortress, upon a big hill, also overlooked the vast city. It also held several statues of Darkknight himself, holding his ancient sword that he formed out of the steel and ice of Rhen Var. Tigeress could sense the planet, and it was almost as if it was Force-sensitive itself. But it was not a living thing, no matter how it seemed to be. “Captain, I want to privately land at the fortress first. I will have some bodyguards with me of course, so you don’t have to worry about me even though the planet is uninhabited.” “Fully understood my Queen, but we need to scout the planet to find the fortress first. The holocrons don’t seem to have it’s location.” Tigeress felt somewhat frustrated, but then remembered that the holocrons indeed didn’t have it’s location. Why was it that they seemed to only be a fraction of a full history? Did her master know about this? She only waited for when the future would come.
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Post by Queen~Tigeress on Mar 19, 2009 15:59:08 GMT -5
I like it very much and its definitly getting better
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Post by Quest on Mar 20, 2009 15:34:36 GMT -5
Thx Darkknight and Tigeress! Really appreciate it. Here's more comin up in this next post (why i make it a different post if b/c it's easier for others to read it.) These next 2 chapters are when our heroes, Tigeress, and the mysterious brown robes Force-users encounter each other. Thank you Wrath and Ender(sort of) for helpin me finish these chapters whether you knew it or not. Anyways, here we are Rhen Var.
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Post by Quest on Mar 20, 2009 15:41:13 GMT -5
Chapter 5: Ice Fortress
As the Eagle came out of hyperspace, the three young adventurers looked with excitement. Rhen Var, the ice planet that contained what they were looking for. As they neared it, they could sense the Force all around it. “It feels as if it’s alive or something!” Secretus exclaimed. “It says that a certain temple and city are in a sort of mountainous area. I’m guessing that’s where we need to go.” Allcaps stated as he punched in the planetary coordinates. They found where they needed to go. As they passed through the atmosphere, they could see that it was indeed in possession as an icy terrain. They passed by ruins of what looked like to be a huge city. They then saw a big building, which was perched on top of a mountain. That was their destination. As they took it down for a landing on a nearby lookout post, they all seemed to sense a sort of ripple in the Force. Secretus felt it more significantly than the others. Grabbing some combat gear just in case, they exited out of their ship and started down the mountain.
A brown coated figure looked up at the mountain. Another was close by. “It seems we have some visitors. It seems our master made a slight error when saying that no one would come here.” “That is why he sent us here, brother. We are here to guard this place when this kind of thing happens.” “What is our plan then?” “We wait for now. See why they have come here.” Both figures disappeared into the snow.
“Finally, I was starting to get bored of going down so much snow.” DOOM had said with relief. The three seemed to be looking at a back entrance to the building, which now looked like a fortress. They also saw a statue of a hooded man with a sword pointing downwards. No doubt that it was Darkknight, the founder of the {Jedi}. They all bowed in respect, and felt the Force strongly as they went inside the fortress. It seemed like a temple, and almost an exact replica of the {Jedi} temple on Coruscant. But that was from the inside. They traveled through and found three graves. They all seemed significant somehow. Each traveler read tried to read the inscriptions around the crypts. They were in utter awe at what they found. These belonged to the three Grand Masters of the old {Jedi}: Ender, Tchdwn, and Snow. They looked at the roof to see a candle-lamp over each crypt, supporting the signifigance of the three. “I think it’s time we move on.” Allcaps suggested. The other two agreed, and walked on as they looked back at the crypts. They were amazed. They were even more amazed that the (Sith) didn’t know about this place. Not yet probably. They finally entered the library. It was a magnificent piece of architecture. It was like a tower, and what looked like dozens of floors all holding shelves of books. Many had been destroyed, along with the knowledge they held. Others that weren’t completely in pieces held common types of books found in everyday-normal libraries. They then went on the top floor, finding what looked to be only holocron holders. They immediately started to search.
“My Queen, we have found the fortress and your shuttle is ready. You may depart whenever.” Captain Apollo reported. “Yes, I think it’s time for me to go now.” Tigress was jumped up out of the Captain’s Throne on the bridge and hurried out the door without hesitation. Indeed, she had been bored. As her shuttle cruised over the city and towards the fortress, she found it nice to land in an ancient hangar. “I want to see the full structure before going inside, then I will want to explore the city after going through the library.” The Queen stated, almost as if she were a treasure hunter finding jewels and gold. She once again sensed an all too familiar ripple, but it was a little different than the last. It was still similar to it though. The guards sensed it, and sensed Tigress’s fear as they went from being at ease to the Soresu lightsaber stance. The Queen motioned for them to put their weapons away and led them down the path towards the fortress. She would be sure not to be caught off guard this time, even if these “ripplers” weren’t against her.
“It seems as though she knows we’re here. Curious.” One brown robe said to the other. “Indeed. She is the one that the Force chose though. We cannot attack her. That is against our orders.” “Should we rid of the pests in the library to clear a path for her?” The other thought for a moment. “Our master said nothing of that. It would also be entertaining for us, if only to hold us over a little longer.” The figures laughed and disappeared.
“DOOM, Caps, any luck?” Secretus had been searching through the holocrons, DOOM the holo-shelves, and Allcaps the ancient catalogs, all for what they had come to look for. “Nothing so far!” “Not a thing, Capt’!” DOOM and Allcaps shouted. Secretus kept on his search. He couldn’t get it out of his mind that he was being watched. He also couldn’t figure out what the ripples he had sensed with the others as soon as they set foot on the snow. It was almost as if they had awakened a spirit that had been doomed to guard its grave in this battlefield. Secretus knew better than to imagine. Then it hit him. He immediately back flipped to the roof and launched himself downwards from there with a lightsaber in one hand and a vibroblade in the other. He swung at what was at first air. Then it came into view, but it exploded somehow. Secretus was knocked back into the roof, which then fell on him and dragged him down to the floor with his two friends. All three spread the wreckage apart and drew out their lightsabers. They barely had any time to think as they parried and tried to counter a double-bladed silver lightsaber that was swinging at them with unimaginable speed. The staff separated itself into two single sabers, which now were moving much faster than before. Soon, Allcaps and DOOM were knocked to the ground unconscious, and Secretus was left fending off for his own. No, this wasn’t going to happen. He had been through so much, and he wasn’t going to let himself or his friends die like this. He broke. He lashed out with everything he had, all emotions and the Force running through him accompanied by adrenaline. He rushed hard, then harder, until he finally knocked both sabers out of his opponent’s hands. He now had time enough to at least look at his opponent. A brown robe covering what looked to be silvery metal armor.
“I see you know some things about combat with the lightsaber, young one.” The Warrior admired. “You still don’t have enough to defeat me.” With that, he unleashed Force Repulse, which knocked Secretus off his feet and into the wall, crushing him into it. Seeing that his sabers were broken, the Warrior pulled out two long swords that were held tightly on the back of his armor, which was worn under his robe. He charged the energy cells in both and charged himself into Secretus. Secretus, witnessing his own saber being smashed to pieces by his enemy’s weapons, grab DOOM’s double-blue staff and continued the fight outside of the library and into the snow. Fighting cautiously but recklessly for the survival of him and his friends, Secretus unleashed what he thought he had never had. He fought quickly with his opponent, even though he had not mastered the staff as well as others and definitely not as well as his opponent. The two always seemed toe to toe. Finally both paused and breathe hard. Secretus collapsed into the snow unconscious after being shot by red lightning. The last thing he saw were two brown robed figures, one walking towards him and the other heading into the library.
Chapter 6: The ICE
In the distance, a white-clothed figure witnessed what had happened. He knew who those two were wearing the brown robes. They had been there for as long as he had. The only thing that kept him and them separated from each other for all this time was that they resided in the fortress and he lived in the city. Both homes had been demolished decades ago, but the city was reused afterward, explaining how it was more intact than the fortress. A sniper rifle appeard out of the cloth, and the scope had the head of one of the Force-users seen on it. “Lets see how you can deflect this.” A streak of yellow burned through the air, vaporizing right through the head of a tired Warrior. The other robe seemed to have disappeared. “Crap” was the last word uttered by the sniper before being knocked unconscious like his damsels in distress. The last sound he heard was the ignition of numerous lightsabers. How familiar they all sounded.
“I do not need to make war with you, Dark Lord.” The robe had said to Tigress. All bodyguards surrounded him as he said it. Tigress must have seen the truth in him, and held her guards off. She was still weary though. “You don’t need to, eh? What do you want then? To sneak up on me like last time?” Tigress sounded angry, as any Sith would sound when encountering anyone looking like an enemy. “I am not he. There are many of us, scattered around the galaxy and beyond into the unknowns.” The figure sounded as if he were older than her. His face still could not be seen, even with the silver saber out.Tigress withdrew, as did he. “Why are you here then, if you don’t wish to fight?” Tigeress asked. “I am here because I was sent here. I will not tell you anymore. Now, why have you come here? For knowledge of the past? There is no wisdom in it. Not from what you look for in that event. Come.” And Tigressu by the robed Force-user. As they arrived at the library, she was told to stay there as the man went off to another part of the fortress. It looked like there was a fight in here.
After going through some holo-books and holocrons on a table near her, Tigress found it startling that they were missing pieces to what she had studied earlier. She turned around after sensing an all too familiar ripple. “How long have you been standing there? I wanted to talk to you as soon as possible.” Tigress seemed to be relaxed, but still cautious about the person she looked at. His hood was off, and she could see tattoos on his forhead. His hair was surprisingly long, as she imagined it would be hard to be unnoticibly fitting in the hood this man wore most of the time. Like the one laying unconscious and the person she met a week ago, he wore brown robes over shiny silvery armor. “I find it somewhat impolite to interrupt one’s dive into knowledge, especially history. I also wanted to leave you to what you came here for. If I announced my presence, I would have defeated my own current purpose.” the man said. His voice was calm, old, but sounded like one that had achieved power. She could sense the Force in this man, and it was like she was staring at the face of the Force. It seemed to be flowing through him from everywhere at once. No doubt had he established some kind of bond with the planet. The question was how he did it. Before she could ask though, he answered it for her. “When one has stayed with another for so long, it will not result in nothing. Whether you except it or not, this planet is alive in the Force, like a creature almost. It’s history supplies ample evidence of this. Not only have massive battles been fought here, but this is where everything started. {Jedi}, (Sith), and others all started out here. Despite their faiths, use of the Force, or what they call themselves, they cannot deny their origins together.” He was a mind-reader too. How was he able to read the minds of Force-sensitives? Wasn’t that impossible? He answered this as well. “I can read your mind because I am strong enough in the Force. It isn’t impossible to few that know how to control well enough to reach every corner of its limits.” “Before, you said that-“ “Yes, it is my current purpose to not let you be interupted. I was sure I wouldn’t be able to hide our prisoners from you for long. They know about you and have seen you in person at Coruscant when you were signing that foolish treaty.” “That treaty was not foolish. It was the only thing to get us at least a part of the galaxy after that war. Now, take me to your prisoners. I did not come to debate the past, but to learn more about it. I only want to see these that claim to know me.” Tigress was in no mood to be given opinions. She was the new Dark Lord, and as such what she said goes, and that was to everyone whether or not she had the galaxy in her hands. The man seemed amused at her, but continued to lead through the halls.
When she came upon three crypts, she saw three that wore {Jedi} robes and the one with the white. She didn’t recognize two of the {Jedi}, but she knew one from the meeting about the treaty. Allcaps, along with his fellow prisoners except the white robes, were fully awakened and shocked. “What are you doing here?” asked Allcaps. “She came for the same purpose as you.” The brown robed man said. “What? You’re the ones that had the other half that I needed? How?” Tigress was in utter awe and shock. Before they could even have a chance to say wonder, the man said “As I said before, {Jedi}, (Sith), and other Force-users are all the same. They had been united with each other twice in history, the last being fifty years ago. I will explain it all right here.” Tigress figured it would take a while, so she leaned against the wall. The prisoners couldn’t, as they were tied up and dangling from the ceiling. “One day, there was someone who went by the name Teff. He was indeed containing a great amount of potential of becoming one of the most powerful {Jedi} in his time, just like Ender.” At the mention of the two names, the three {Jedi}, and even the white robes, had given their full attention to the story. “Teff was found by Tchdwn, a Grand Master, and his apprentice Elite. Teff became a {Jedi} through them, and he eventually befriended Ender. The two liked each other from the start. They were both interesting opponents to the other, except that Ender had more of the upper hand in duels. Teff eventually joined a special unit of {Jedi}, called the =Spartans=, whom were led by Grand Master Snow. Teff rose through the ranks after saving {Jedi} from a threat called the {Blade} and besting a majority of his peers. Eventually, Teff was made General of the =Spartans= and was made a Grand Master when Ender had taken an absence and went to the Unknown Regions of the galaxy. That’s when the Second {Jedi} Civil War truly started. Teff had declared treason on Tchdwn and Snow, along with any that supported them. They didn’t have enough forces to defend themselves, as Teff held over half of the {Jedi} and had influence with a Force-using group called the ^Arrows^. With the combined might of the two, they managed to overthrow the two Grand Masters, and Teff went on to lead the {Jedi}, now called the =Spartans= in whole, on a crusade against many civilizations in the galaxy. One of these were the (Sith), who became part of what Teff called the Intergalactic Confederate Empire, ICE for short. Teff’s reign didn’t last for long however. Ender came back just in time, rallying a secret group he had known called the {WRL}. They were extremely skilled in combat, and could even best Teff’s own warriors. This was proven by the war and battle that took place on this very planet the Ender gathered his troops to attract Teff’s attention. He succeeded, and the two Powers fought. The two were toe-to-toe until Teff came back with reinforcements and went off himself to fight Ender. {WRL} won, and ICE was destroyed.”
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Post by Quest on Mar 20, 2009 15:48:46 GMT -5
I know that all that stuff is completely fiction, and that there was no ICE or any of that. Sorry for the deaths of Tchdwn and Ender and all that. I needed this stuff as a backstory for stuff later on (like the brown robed guys). Anyways, hope you enjoy!
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Post by Corran on Mar 20, 2009 17:19:13 GMT -5
Better then most stories. Id say better then anything anyone else wrote but ender actually.
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Post by Platypus on Mar 20, 2009 17:31:21 GMT -5
What about my stories
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Post by Corran on Mar 20, 2009 17:53:06 GMT -5
you have stories? I liek things that are put togethor not thrown togethor that I have to think and concetrate to figure out whats happening
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Post by Quest on Mar 20, 2009 21:14:09 GMT -5
lol, of course cus he's a MAMMAL!!! I didn't really expect to even be able to compete with Ender (Liber Sum PWNS U!!!). But he did inspire me with the 5 Brothers. He wasn't the only one though. I've been thinkin about makin this story ever since old {Jedi}, possibly November/December 2007 for a retirement gift. Couldn't get good enough ideas together, and i tried to make one and it epically failed me.
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